Inside a hole in a Chinese restaurant, an old mouse was looking for cats. This mouse happened to be 23 years old. As it happens the main chef had just set a rat trap and just walked away, when the mouse came out. The rat trap was too big the mouse could get the bait (which was cheese) to feed his family, without setting it off. He got the cheese and took it home.
“Thank you, Jonny,” his sister exclaimed, ”Where did you get it,” she asked.
”The rat trap that the chef set right in front the hole,” he replied.
Hi Sophie,
I loved your story and how you used specific details (for example, the Chinese restaurant) in it. This made your story feel unique. Well done also on integrating the technique of the week (beginning with a “Where Things Are” sentence) so effectively.
Keep on writing!
Hey Sophie
I like this old mouse. He lives in a pretty good place where he can go to a restaurant and get some takeaway cheese. Great story writing 🐭🧀👍